Can you help with German grammar correction?

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  1. marciofs

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    I designed a flayer to be send to Germans mailboxes. The problem is that my German is not good enough yet.
    I am looking for help from anybody who can correct the words and grammar issue in my text.
    I will be very thankful. :smile:

    That is it.
    Just to be clear what I meant to say here is the version in English:

    This will be a great help for me. :smile:
     
  2. AgX

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    I'm a native speaker. Don't ask ME about german grammar... Ask a foreign speaker, he will know.

    But... your text is terrible. Even to me...


    But your English text is enigmatic too:

    Printed on pure cotton base paper and fibre base paper

    Makes no sense to me.
     
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    The first one is Art 300 and the seccond one fibre paper.
    Since I am not sure if buyers know the name Ilford ART 300 I just say pure cotton base paper.
    I also don't know if buyers know what I am talking about if I say "Silver Gelatin".

    So I say the way it sounds understandable to anybody.

    Edited... What I say above is that I offer print on two type of paper. I am not saying that I print with Art300 that have fibre. It doesn't exist. :smile:
     
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    Translation sent.
     
  5. marciofs

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    You are Great!!!
    Thank you very very much. :smile:
     
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    Yes a native speaker will use what sounds right without thinking about rules. An English speaker will say, "You sent the package to whom?" without thinking that the preposition to requires the objective case.
     
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    Exactly! When I'm stuck (again) with some grammatical issue, I tend to think: Does it sound right?
    Forgot most of that rules, if ever I learnt them. A foreign speaker most likely had learned them, and not forgotten yet.

    Gerald:
    I would have said "to whom" to.
    So, you just can't rely on all foreign speakers...
     
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    I know it. I used to be very fluent in French and among the Frenchs that I knew I was the one who could explain them the rules of their language.
     
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    Márcio,

    first, I'm glad that AgX could help you, but given that you are a professional and this is a commercial website
    maybe you should consider (for your future requirements) to pay someone to have this done professionally. I think your beautiful pictures deserve high quality texts and such an investment would pay off in the long run.
    As you write that you are based in Freiburg, Germany, there is one point that I have to bring to your attention.
    In case that your business is registered in Germany, you are required by law to have an "imprint" ("Impressum") on your (commercial) website. Your website is obviously missing such an imprint, which could not only invite hefty fines from the authorities but could also lead to very expensive legal action; unfortunately there are some nasty lawyers out there whose "business model" it is to scan the web for commercial websites that lack imprints, then initiating legal action against them and collecting their lawyer's fees from them. This is a real threat, a lot of small businesses have had to learn this the hard way, so please get this sorted out as soon as possible.

    Good luck,
    John
     
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    Thank you for the alert.
    I am actually still looking on how to register a company because somebody told me I have to, but because I am not able to comunicate well in German things are slow for me to find out how to do.
    But I will check this out too.

    Thank you very much.
     
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    Just sent you a private message!