Shooting into the sun is difficult work, especially when expressing your visualization under the enlarger. I think you've done great work both in exposing and printing, if the physical print is as represented here digitally. You could lighten the shadows a bit, reducing contrast overall, but this can be problematic with the relative small film size area of 35mm, and the contrast kind of works for me given the time of day. My main bugaboo with this sort of thing is artifact (i.e., not intended) lens flare. Personally, I find that the bottom of the picture adds nothing to the composition, and that is coincidentally where the flare is. I'd crop that out and compose more off center from your main elements, according to my taste, not your visualization. I'm big on cropping when tools and circumstance dictates.