No harm may have been meant, but the tone of your post is unnecessarily rude and personal. It is possible to critique someone's work and writing without personal insults. A constructive critique will give all who read it, some thing to think about. Your critique, however, does not.
I'm reluctant to delete it since you are new here, but I hope in future, you'll choose to be more constructive and collegial when you post to APUG.